U can truly paint a photo. it flows well. it would a really good song:)

That's so sad!! I almost cried. honestly. very good write. 5/5

Very powerful poem with a very powerful message. I think you did a nice job, and the repetitive line was unusual but constantly reinforced in your mind the theme and strength of the poem itself. It was a very good piece from you Midnight Sun~ Keep it up!
Charisma*

I loved this!
It reminded me a little of my poem the real enemy.
I thought this was excellently written.
The wording was a joy to read, and the imagery was astounding.
Well done.

Great imagery in this powerful piece. Very heartrending. Good job on this one!

Oh.. wow. This made me cry. It was so powerful.. & I can.. sadly, relate.. Lol. I know exactly how this is. & I think you did an excellent job writing about it. It seems like you took the words right out from me.. Cos this is basically what I'd write if I were right about my experiences with things like this. I don't know if you have experienced it.. But, if you haven't.. It sure does seem like it. Cos you did an amazing job writing this. Fantasic, intense imagery.. & Beautiful wording.

Amazingggggg job. Keep it up, babe.

Bri.x

OH! I forgot to say.. I ABSOLUTLEY LOVEDD THE TITLE OF THIS! It fit so very well.. AMAZING!

That was a very powerful write ,well written and very deep, sad to know that this continues and seems like no one wants to do anything about it, I'm glad you are talking about it and getting it out while you are still young, mine still haunts me day in and day out, nothing seems to make it better , but at times it gets harder to deal with,, again thanks for for sharing,,, your friend Tracy d 5/5