Ooh i like this one. =)
i don't usually go for free verse, but this one still somehow kept me reading. u had an inconsistent flow, yet it worked for the poem. i think also the fact that i still have no idea what the true meaning to the poem was, makes it even more thought-provoking. there was something about it tho that makes it not quite a 5/5.. but i can't put my finger on it.

but gratz!
4.8/5 (which of course rounds to 5 xD)

keep writing, u have potential and talent,

♥ Christie