Comments : It should've been beautiful

  • 17 years ago

    by Yulie

    This is really good. A lot of emotions here. 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Oceansoul

    It's a nice poem, it has a good use of words,
    maybe ( in other poems of you aswell) you should try to make sentences have a more equal lenght( or about the same amount of syllables, ) such easy things can make a poem much more readable and have a better flow,
    :) keep writting