I liked this. I have to say I think it would be better if you didn't put an explanation right there, so each individual could imagine the situation for themself, and come up with there own interpritation, but I really liked it aside from that.

~Amber

I dont knowh what to say cuz its like that in my family to... i hope it wil get better with you, cuz i knowh what it is doing to you...
°Amy°

WOW this is deep. You wrote it really well though. 5/5 and I totally know what you mean.

That was beautiful! And I'm doing it just for the free comments, you express it perfectly! Good job! :D

Oops, I meant NOT doing it for the free comments lol sorry!

So simple, yet so powerful. blocking out one sound with another is genius. i love this poem alot. if i could use this technique i would use it often. i lovw ur writting.
love willow xxoo