Hey I loved this poem so much. its mad sweet . Ur a really good writer. Nd thank u fo da coment on my poem. It means a lot!

Ohh wow..this is a deep and wonderful poem...gr8;ly written...nd i know that the only place for a girl to b is to b entranced in the look and the touch of her lover:D
good job
5/5
bree tk care x

Awww!That was an amazing poem.I lvoe it.

<3Amber

Wow, I really enjoyed in this one. I like everything about it: The topic, choice of words and form of the whole piece. The last stanza is my favorite. Truly beautifully written piece.
Keep up, 5/5 from me.

Another great write! So beautiful in every word. I was hooked as soon as I read the first line.
5/5
*Brittney

I loved it was very sweet and i believe this has happened to alot of people this is the best poem of yours so far 5/5

First things first, I enjoyed the poem. :]
It was sweet, Full of emotion and you put a lot into it, I'm sure.

Second things..second? :D
Er okay;

I found that if you structured it, You'd be much better at expressing yourself.
You've got the idea, You've got the vocab, The emotion..Now to turn it into an excellent poem. :]
Atm it strikes me as a work in progress, Make it easier for the reader to read. If structured, The flow becomes much easier.

Read over it a few times, Fix your little mistakes.
Add Your capital letters, Your punctuation etc and then give it a little more of a structure.

Just my opinion, But I did enjoy the poem once I got into it. :]

Awwe u sound sweet!

xoxTaylor