Just A Voice

An interesting piece with a satisfactory flow. I don't think that using the 'u' and the '3' makes you less intelligent, like Tainted Beauty said, but it does take away from the feel of the poem. Therefore, I would suggest changing those details. In regards to the flow, you could improve on it by changing the length of some of the lines. But on the whole it's a good piece :).

I liked the words and rhymes you used, the whole poem was very mysterious. The way you used slang such as "u" and "3" made you, and your poem seem less intelligent, if you fixed that, it would do so much for the poem. Also, "have'nt" is spelled wrong, I believe it should be "haven't". I did not really understand the meaning of this poem, but as I said, it was well written.

--Steph

Great poem...

Excellent job on the poem!

Great job!