The message of this poem was wonderful, however, I had to read it twice to understand the format it was written in. You have a rhyme scheme of ABCB in the first two stanzas, Then you change it to AABB in the third.

It took a minute bu realized that you had a format that worked. ABCB, ABCB, AABB, ABCB, ABCB, AABB, then back to ABCB.

The flow was a bit rushed at times and didn't fit the rhythm of the poem as a whole, but like I said, after reading it a couple of times was able to make the adjustment.

Overall, good job.
Jeannie

There was a lot of emotion in this
poem hun. a very heartfelt piece.
very well written but. keep it up. xx