Err umm WOW that was,very very dark really like how you ended it great poem

I don't think I can go to bed now

This was a little confusing because of the structure.
Apart from that, I enjoyed the imagery you used in this.
I thought the flow seemed kind of shaky in some places, but apart from that it was okay.

AH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Dude! That part about the boy.. eww nasty!!! Great story though.. lol.. loved it.. very dark. I still think you need some puncuation, I felt rushed again. Pretty gorey (sp)

Amazing Job

5/5