A Beautiful Creation

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Dec 29, 2006


Beneath the broken, battered sky,
Where the dazzling stars die,
Lies a swamp and a ruby red rose,
And a place not a soul goes.

A dashing beauty hereby lay,
In a frosted swamp, where darkness stays.
This dashing beauty lives and thrives,
As wind around gently sighs.

A place where beauty is found,
In a place where only darkness surrounds.
Surronding the place is a disgusting thing,
A place where there is no winter or spring.

A swamp watches over this rose,
In the place where not a soul goes;
Roses in a swamp is a beautiful creation,
Living such a life deserves admiration.
The ugly swamp still cries out in frustration,
As roses in a swamp is such a beautiful creation.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    You have added a wonderful picture in my mind this morning, thanks for the words and thoughts you have which have found their way to paper. Bravo

  • 17 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    This poem definitely had inner meaning. You could see it so many different ways. One way, was mentioned in the comment above, finding beauty in everything. Yet, I also saw it as something beautiful surviving in something so awful, showing that you can make it in the toughest times. But that was just something I saw in it.
    As far as a critique for this poem

    A place where beauty is found,
    In a place where only darkness surrounds.

    Those were the only two lines that threw the flow off to me. But other than that, this poem was very good and very stunning because it was so well thought out and provided such a visual.
    Good job! And thanks for entering in my contest. Sorry about the hassle there at the end.
    1st comment of 2
    Charisma*

  • 17 years ago

    by xXxAngelEyes007xXx

    Its an amazing poem i love it so much keep writting

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    This is such a beautiful poem. The vision you have created is breath taking. Excellent.

  • 17 years ago

    by donna

    When I first read this I thought it was sad, but reading it for the third time I realise it is not sad at all.. There is beauty in everything if You look close enough.

    Another beautifully written poem.. well done 5/5 xx

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