My Surrender

by DeathlyAmore   Dec 31, 2006


End my misery on thought I alas despise so much...

My Heart filled with bitterness and hatred re-done

Darkness that swallowed me whole....

My tears of blood forever to rot in run...

Bitter Darkness surrounding this wh*r*sh*t soul

My heart Shattered for the error of my life cries...

Listen to it... hear it... hear it scream to the abyss...

Screaming for mercy as the darkness makes it die....

I surrender my soul to it...

My mind lost forever alas in the abyss of spite...

The power overwhelmed my will... i see the Darkness...

My heart.... and soul... No longer in sight....

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  • 16 years ago

    by Dark Demise

    Very deep, and you can deffinatally see the personal connection in this poem, some parts I would change though to make it have a little better flow, and some of the parts i would switch out words that were previously used and say different words in place of them (but thats me) over all I think you really got the message through in this poem, and I like how you used the word "alas" in your poem, it added so much more to it!

    Keep writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Joey Matthews

    Seems I can only re-voice what's already been said before me but I honestly enjoyed reading this. Very creative, the lines jump and you're very talented.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Gizmo

    5/5 :]

  • 17 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Very interesting and creative. You created very intense and dark atmosphere, whole poem is greatly written. I like the wording in it, and the flow is good, too.
    Keep up, 5/5 from me

  • 17 years ago

    by JiKaRiN

    That was really nice! 5/5

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