Comments : Leaving Me in Pain

  • 17 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Erm...I'm not all that sure what to say. It seemed more like a sympathy rant than anything. The truth is people do move on but if all you can do is sit in a tantrum about it then it's not good for anyone. I hope it got all the bottled up emotion out, because it was a very emotional piece.
    There are a few wording issues eg last line of third stanza, it should be "you're" In the fourth stanza it should be "flashbacks." Also, it's spelt "you" rather than "u." And you may want to capitalise your every "I" to make it gramatically correct.
    Keep writing, seems you have a lot of emotion inside of you.

  • 17 years ago

    by Christina McDowell

    Gabbi, ur so good. feel exactly what that poem is depicting... keep it up gurl!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Nicole

    5/5 ur poem brings tears to my eyes. ur poems are all excellent and suit their genres really well.