Wow! That was.....amazing! You are so good! I loved that poem it was great! Keep up the amazing work!
Burning~Wings

Thanx debs, i fixed it

Well done! I luved it! keep writinf!

Very well written piece. The word choice is excellent. You seem to have a talent here. Great Job!

Its sad but thats the idea of it... well done... its well written and flows perfectly... you captured the feelings perfectly and the emotion comin from it is strong... great job and thank you for the comment

Poor, poor girl. I was quite intriqued how you managed to fully understand the frivolous "my-prince-charming, little-girl thing" Gotta admit, you've got perspective. Its a shame that so many people rely on some figment of their imagination to sweep them off their feet and save them from their lives, when all along, perhaps her savior was right in front of her, but she was too dependent on some fantasy to see it. I enjoyed your poem. It has alot of double-meaning to it that I don't think people really catch. nice

Wow!!!! this is so sad and so deep.. great job!! i love it.

Why write about a girl when you are a boy? Is it a girl you adore? Or.. maybe you are in disguise? Oo.

ANYWAY. It had great emotion and heart. Though, when Prince Charming comes.. and finds her.. wont he be so heartbroken.. and do the same? So her death brought another. How sad. Kinda like Romeo and Juliet.

Happy New Year.

Wow. the is new, not a happy ending with mr. charming.

i love the rhyming. the poem showedd how rhyming isnt just something for upbeat poems, it works well with even the saddest. great work, keep it up bryan!

5/5.

Well, i liked it, there were a couple things though... i wasn't quite sure on the porcelain part, why was she porcelain, why were they porcelain tears? maybe describe that a little more. i think you could definitely go more into this poem. Prince charming was also used a lot, maybe find a different way to describe him... but all in all, it was a good write, nice job

Hmm...
I'm not sure what I think...

I liked this. The way it was written...However, it was very cliche 'I want to die because my love left me'...But, somehow it was written differently.
I didn't really feel much emotion in it either..Just words on the paper. I want to FEEL her pain...Make me feel it.
However, I did like how it was written, and the ending was astonishing. Nicely done there.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex5.5

Very,Very ... well written ... my fav. part..."If my Prince Charming finds this, don't have any fear,
I will die here now with these Porcelain Tears."
Excellent job!

Wow, its so beautifully sad, you did well!

Narc xxx

I think the line:
She writes down her feelings, each and every day,hoping her true love will come and take her pain away.
would flow better as
She has written down her feelings, each and every day, hoping her true love would come and take her pain away. I think that part sounds better in past tense since she is writing her final note now. I understood the porcelain face, but why were the tears porcelain? The poem was sad, it reminded me of Romeo and Juliet. You did a nice job overall.

Well done mate. Great poem, full marks. Thanks for looking at some of my stuff. Keep up the good work.

I loved this!
I thought the imagery was astounding, the rhyme scheme and flow worked really well and the wording was a pleasure to read.
Excellently written.

Wow Bryan, like always you did an excellent Job. Very beautifully written, and sad as well. Great Job! Keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

Great job...

Very good poem Bryan and thank you for commenting on mine. Like one of the other writers wrote it does sound like a Romeo and Juliet, heartbreaking but with a very good flow to it. Nice job 5/5.

This is definitely a poem! 5/5