That was awesome. All of the repititions seemed to fit like a puzzle, but you must have done that so effortlessly.. thats the way it sounds.

You did a great job with this Terzanelle style. Very original or a least rare combination of dark sensual seduction.

Wow that is soo beautiful. I love it. I give you a 5 for just being really excellent!

This gave me goosebumps. I loved it! Your rhyming and flow was perfect. And your vocab.. whoosh.. amazing! I loved this part the best:

Smile broadly and you'll do well,
In these dusty halls of Hell,
I have so many lies I have to tell.

You did a really great job!

Excellent

5/5

I find this style of writing very complicated, and I admire anyone who tries it. It really does appear difficult. The end was my favourite part:

"What you lack, is what I desire."

That closing sentence was just perfect.

5/5.

I cant pretened that your writing doesnt scare me a little!!! but that just adds to the effect you poems have, i LOVE this one and your going straight on my favorites, keep up the amazing work!!!
kat!-x-

Nice poem. ive been totally into that vampire thing. so ur title, attractive ;)
check out the book by Stephenie Meyer.
TWILIGHT. and NEW MOON.

Wow.. really nice poem!!

This is really cool! i love how this was something so different.. it was great!! i loved all the stanzas but my favourite definitely had to be the ending one. Because it was so strong and gripping ya know.. o and btw its really good how when you have used a style of poetry you explain what it is so the people who read it know. 5/5 well done :)

This is really cool! i love how this was something so different.. it was great!! i loved all the stanzas but my favourite definitely had to be the ending one. Because it was so strong and gripping ya know.. o and btw its really good how when you have used a style of poetry you explain what it is so the people who read it know. 5/5 well done :)