Wow, Just wow. That was wonderfully written. I loved it. I can relate and I am sure others can as well. The flow as well as the strucutre were both good. And the use of your words were great, however; I think you should use the words, "want to" instead of, "wanna" Other than that excellent job!

Peace, Joe

Awww... i loved it, u should let her read it.

Thanks for the comment and I hope we stay in touch. Brillant poem by the way. It's lovely.

Well it seems to me young man that your in love. I remember the first girl I ever fell in love with and we actually lasted a long time about 5 years. We broke up a little while ago. Love is very special but it never seems to last like we plan, be careful with oyur heart my friend, amazing poem tho 5/5 fer sure great flow

Beautifully penned and heartfelt dedication to your love. I bet she was impressed. Girls love the sentimental stuff. Awesome job!

Absolutly wonderful...this one caused me to loose my breath. 5/5