by Brittany
I like this. I like how there's this certain mystery and darkness that kind of sheds near the end. The fearness of the male character sort of fades as the femininity guides him into a better place. |
by Void
Alright, well I'm not very good at critiquing these ones, but unfortunately I am unable to critique your love poems. (My computer signs me out and sometimes freezes when I open those up.) So here I am. I love that this was done in the form of a story - and I have found that people who can write poetry in the form of a long, understandable story accomplish quite alot as a writer. If they're really good, they accomplish more than us who do it for the pure rush and feeling of 'poems for emotional release' kind of thing. :P |