Comments : Lost feeling

  • 17 years ago

    by Bryan

    Well its pretty good, only a few things you can change like capitalize the beginning of your sentences, and on the 11th line make it "Is she more beautiful than me?", on the 12th line make it "Can she kiss ypu better than me?" but other than the capitalization mistakes this is a good poem, 5/5!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by TRAGiC BEAUTY

    Great job! I loved it!
    xoxo

  • 17 years ago

    by brianna

    Great poem, really beautiful

  • 17 years ago

    by robin milford

    Excellent thanks for your comment on "My soul mate

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    "I did like you," < I liked you.
    "but something has changed,

    My feelings changed,"
    ^ Changed is used twice, kinda messes up the flow.
    "you thing I" < think.
    "you're wrong..." < I think ' you were' would sound better.

    The poem would have probably been better as one or two stanzas, instead of how it is. It kinda messes up the flow. The flow wasn't to great. But the emotion was okay, along with the with actual poem.
    4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    I liked this. It was like a poem/love affair/story lol. In this line,

    "did you thing I wouldn't find out?"

    thing should be think I believe. Other than that it seemed really heartfelt and there was great flow. 5/5

    marcella