I love you....

by Racheal   Jan 3, 2007


Why can't I express what I'm feeling inside?
The flame was bown out, the romance died.
You left me here, confused and rejected,
feeling abused, ignored and neglected.

Why can't I tell you this simple phrase?
My mind is so lost in life's jumbled maze.
Why do I love you when you don't seem to care?
I am feeling so much, but you're unaware.

My mouth tries to speak, but my heart interrupts
I cannot say, for I feel I will corrupt
the love of my life, standing so perfectly there.
He doesn't know how I treasure what we share.

Now I'm alone, waited too long
I held it inside, and everything went wrong

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  • 17 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    I like this one. I would change a couple things in this stanza for the purpose of flow.

    "My mouth tries to speak, but my heart interrupts
    I cannot say, for I feel I will corrupt
    the love of my life, standing so perfectly there.
    He doesn't know how I treasure what we share."

    I would say:

    "My mouth tries to speak, but my heart interrupts
    I cannot say, for I feel I' ll corrupt
    the love of my life, standing perfectly there.
    He doesn't realize the treasure we share."

    You don't have to take my suggestions of course, I just think it would flow better this way. Overall, nicely done.

  • 17 years ago

    by brittni

    I feaking love it... good jobbb!!

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