by TeAr dROp Jan 3, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
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You took my hand |
by Jenni
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This is beautifully written. i loved how you said "What's left of me is broken" it was my favorite line. wonderfully written 5/5 |
by Rachel RTVW
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Heartfelt write. I believe the last line should read dreams instead of dream. Other than that, nice job! |
by Cindy
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This is really a sad poem. Someone must have hurt you really bad. The emotion comes through. Take Care Cindy |
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There are a lot of grammatical errors in this poem which need correcting. you keep changing your tense within in the poem from past to present. probably better if you choose one or the other. |
by Rona
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I thought it was sad, but real deep. I liked it! Well, there were a few typos I saw, such as: |