At my weakest

by behind her tears is abroken heart   Jan 3, 2007


I cry tears of blood slowly dripping down my arm, the cuts deeper with each tear that cry. All the pain, All the hate inside me is now just a memory. my cuts so deep, my vision gets blurry! But my pain is to deep, i keep thinking "i cant give into my weakness. i cant let my self do this. im not yet ready to leave the world"
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so i try to replace my tears with the tears of blood dripping down my arm.
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I keep cutting deeper, the pain is getting stronger, i think to myself just one more cut and that will be all. i feel myself accidently hit a weak spot in my arm, slowly i feel myself dying all is collapsing around me. As my life starts to end and i relize what ive done
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ i pray to god my parents dont find me, and as one final good bye i write i love you beside me in blood.

***OK i cant think of a title for this..well i did but it was a little Corney it was cuts till the end i would really appreciate it if you would let me know if you have an idea or any suggestions on how to fix the poem and the title..comments are greatly appreciated and if you'd like ill comment back thanks

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  • 17 years ago

    by waking up inside

    We...........broke up

  • 17 years ago

    by waking up inside

    He's guna find out holly.. he's guna figure it all out and im guna die.. im serioulsy guna die.. I can't let him find out.. i just can't.....

  • 17 years ago

    by waking up inside

    Well thats different a gay man is the new hugh heffner teehee. at least he wont have to take viagra to do the bunnies he'll jus do his boyfriends.. and you of course since you ARE his new wife and all. sorry we didn't work out.. Im already getting married ..to a GUY :P

  • 17 years ago

    by waking up inside

    'at my weakest'
    title

    its good i like the idea ur going with you jus need to work or ur flow and transitions more. maybe try outlining it and centering it up.. it tends to make things flow better.. everyone has their own style some are better than others and the things that make a great poem is meaning depth and flow. look around on here and play around with other's outlines eventually it'll jus pop into ur head and BOOM awesome poem! lol. good luck

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