This is o.k the flow is a little off but i like the writing it's vry deep

Wow.. HOW CAN ANYONE NOT VOTE A PERFECT 5?! ... omg wow.. I LOVED IT! The only problem i found were:

Each petal that fall on the ground, ***falls***
and
Your last line... wouldn't it be love you not loved you?

But other than that it was amazing! The imagination, the rhyming, the flow... gash.. I loved it, I hope your next is just as good!

AMAZING job

5/5!

Wow. Speechless. 5/5. I dunno what to say. Its just amazing!

Wow.. You did a very good job at writing this piece. I could just feel the emotions coming out all throughout the poem. There was a couple of lines that really stood out to me and thought that they were amazing like "While I carve my pain into my heart" That was very well worded with so much emotion behind it. I also liked the line "I took the dagger, filled it with crimson lust." Really good word choice on that. Overall amazing poem! 5/5

I enjoyed your others so well could not wait for another, I will be back
BTW This was as tastefully done as Romeo and Juliet

Excellent work. You definitely have immense talent. Keep it up.

*Adding to favourites.

This poem wasnt that bad 4/5 keep it up...Dont worry your still like my favorite writers though...I just love the way you think and write your poems..

Wow, gerat poem.
I like the way the title is fitted into the poem, your rhyming is great keep it up!
Steph

AHH! Sorry I took so long to get this one done. -.- Got caught up with school and stuff. But ere it is...

Well I didn't think it was as well done as your others. It could be improved. Starting off, I think the flow was off in many places. If a poem doesn't have flow when it's meant to, it won't make sense as a poem. Try re-reading this and see if you can see what I'm seeing.

Also, the rhymes were easy and way too cliche to use for a topic so deep. The rhymes and vocabulary could've gone deeper into the topic and it would do well. It might take up more room, but it would be improved.

But overall, the poem wasn't bad. There was a lot of emotion behind the topic, and the title just sums it all up together. I love that in a poem. Keep it up. =) 4/5 xoxo

Samantha

I knew this would be a great poem, the title really caight my attention.
your words are so powerful, i was gripped to every line, a very sad and heartfelt poem.
you have talent.
keep writing
love Tara-Kay