Aw.. cute poem.. i love how hot cocoa is the remedy to this girls pain.. very simple but still makes for a great poem.. however.. the last stanza doenst rhyme... and i love it so much but it doesnt rhyme so it doesnt fit in with the rest of the poem

I didn't comment on calloused palms because it is in explicit and I don't read explicit poetry, but I am glad I read this piece here because it's so good. I really liked it. I like how it rhymes and then at the end, doesn't. It was well worded and I enjoyed it!
Good job!
Charisma*

This poem has a very real feel to it. Like it's an actual thing that someone has gone through or something like that. I really like the last stanza.. It stood out to me the most. The flow and rhythm was really good and held up very well. Great job on this! 5/5

I have to disagree with the previous comments about the last stanza. I think in the context it's done it spoils the flow of the poem, and it was a flow that kept me reading. While I'll admit I'm a bit of an old purist when it comes to the construction of poetry, I find that rhyme-then-no-rhyme variations seem to indicate indecision and sometimes laziness. But I know the latter is not the case here at all. This is a neat piece of work that was most enjoyable. Except the last bit. Sorry!

I loved it! Fantastic! Hot Coco is such a comfort drink... Very nicely written!
5/5

Ciao~