This is so so so so great. this should have won an award. i loved the ending the most. its how it should be. so much love in this poem!

5 from me. david

5/5 excellent. i really liked it. because of your use of repetition with 'always' it made your poem more sencereand deeper. promising. i dont think the last line really fits in as well because the rest of it usually end in "you" or close to it. but great job i really really liked this one. =]
--linds[x]

5/5 excellent. i really liked it. because of your use of repetition with 'always' it made your poem more sencereand deeper. promising. i dont think the last line really fits in as well because the rest of it usually end in "you" or close to it. but great job i really really liked this one. =]
--linds[x]

Again you have used repetition in this poem to show the srength of what you mean :D loved it

xxx alex xxx