Um i liked it bujt i think you should make it more in depth like make me feel all of your confussion

For a freestyle this is amazing!! That being said, if you took the time to fix it up a little afterwards, it could have been flawless!! ;) Next time you've got a freestyle, write it out and try to see where you can put more emphasis on the emotion to bring it out. Just keep rereading it, it'll come to you, especially if it's as good as this off the top of ur head (and heart) 5/5