Beautiful poem hun 5/5 =] you guys did a great job

You have truly written this from your heart. The passion of love that you have for this young lady is felt throughtout the read. Awsome work!!!

sadaddy

Wonderful write! i truly enjoyed reading this! awesoem job!!! 5/5

Ashley

Once again joe great work keep it up!!! i always enjoy reading your poems

Beautiful poem. Keep it up 5/5

Your work is awesome Joe!!! Another amazing poem!! its so meaningful keep it up

Laura

I really liked this poem. Though one thing that kind of threw it off was the rhyming. How it rhymed in some parts and not in others. But collabs are hard to write...and this one was quite good. Sad and full of emotion, but all in all a beautiful write! You guys should do more! Lol. Take care.

-` Poetess

Well this is a beautifuly done collaboration.
As minutes turn into hours
And hours turn to days
My heart keeps on beating
For the one I truely love
This stanza is my favorite part. I think because it strikes a chord in me. You did a excellent job on this write. The emotion is great.

I like to thank you Joe for giving me the chance to do this collab with you, this turn out as one of my favorite work that i done in years, and it is because how much time you gave to it, exellent, you are a great writer and I look forword to do more poetry work with you.

This is one of your best poems. It's a rhyme poem that still makes sense and still has great emotion. The ending surprised me. It started out really sweet and romantic, but then the words "ripped apart" blew me away...in a good way.

Deeply written. Good Contrasts between happy moments and bitter ones. Really enjoyed it!!

Godbless
Sammib

Great work!
5/5
This was awsum, ur a very good writter!
=-)

Nice poem.....5/5

God bless u

This poem was very nice! I loved the writing style, the only thing that i would say did not flow was the second to last stanza because you did not rhyme it, other than that i love it! 5/5

This is an excellent write, The meaning is deep and the words fit in so well, I understand the pain in this poem all to well, excellent job 5/5

Good job together guys....very heartfelt emotional piece. I like the tone and flow very much. Good transition from happy beginning to heartbreaking ending.

Everything is passing in this life ... the hours , the days , and we are passing with them too ... Great poem ! my vote is 5/5

I like collaboration poems, this one is great, great job joe, 5/5!!!!

I really liked this poem. It started out so happy and sweet, but it ended sadly. I really liked the first two stanzas. They really pulled me into the poem. It was really good and kept my attention the whole time. There was some really good word choice and nice descriptions of how the writer was feeling. Great job on this! 5/5

Okay so this is a really cute poem.. but i have some suggestions..

in this stanza
"Now during these cold nights,
I miss that gentle touch.
You presented me sorrow for the deepest love,
All I will say is thank you very much."

the third line is too long

as for the rest of the poem.. its really great but its has a weird rhyming scheme.. idk if is intentional or not but the first two stanzas rhyme but not the third and then the 4th one rhymes and not the 5th and then the last one rhymes...

idk if its supposed to be that way or not..

and lastly i think you have type-o in the last stanza

"Now how it is ripped apart."

shouldnt it be

"now [has been] ripped apart..?