Aww!!! ~i got confused at some parts, but i finally got it!~ it's awesome! great job with this one; it's a sweet story! Please update with more poetry :) ur improving...

Isn't P&Q a great place to improve ur poetry? In my opinion, it's better here than just writing over and over; never letting anyone just say something :)

Good job; this poem rocks :)

~Rain

This is a great poem! Love the emotion~
5/5

Heh :)

in response to ur comment:

Yes, it is about that guy... I wish that I could meet him... one day. That day's the day we can walk on the beach and be free to do as we please; one day :)

Great poem it wuz really good and i could see what u wuz tryna say and ur point of this poem good joB and great flow to it 5/5 =]

Aww love it!! the last stanza is my favorite! and no, i havent deleted my latest poems... there are problems with the site and the mods are trying to fix this. anywho, keep up the great work! looking forward to reading more.
-xXx-

This happens way too much... But the poem is excellent.

[Tragic]