This is a great poem. I mean it really is true. I liked the part about the cloud and the word you used. This is an excellent poem. 5/5
-Vino

I really like this poem. a lot. the idea is really good but it seems at times that the rhyms are forced. but the flow is great.

keep it up

You left a request on my free comments post, and despite me asking for non cliche poems this is one of the few that isn't cliche so far. I fear I'm getting a bit blunt with the cliche writers...it's naughty I know, but my nerves can't take much more.

Anyway, this was very well written.
The flow and rhymes were good and you used an original choice of words.
It's sad, but I could relate. My dad is so smart and he wants me to be the same, but I'm not...so falling short of expectations is something I do regular.
I have one suggestion...I think on the third line of the fourth stanza you meant "you're."
Thanks for sharing.

Ryhming seems forced in some places and a little off
but other than that pretty good

Great poem and I agree that it's not at all cliche..very unique! 5/5