This is the best one ive read so far. its good!!

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Olivia!

Line 11 it should be neck* not next and have you been listening to Ne-Yo thats in one of his famous songs. i really love the realness and the intensity. you're an excellent writer WOW keep it up jay jay. and comment sum more of my stuff old nad new if u can thnxs.

lissa

WoW this is such a true poem! I love it! GREAT job!

The poem was good. One grip though...Although the message was there, you need to fix the way you have it set out.

I gave it a 4, because the spelling and how you set it out, are a slightly bit messed up.