This was really good, I can only suggest one thing -that you swap around the last line to say 'and take away my fear' and then if you read it again it rhymes properly... only a suggestion I thought it was really good and don't mean to offend or anything :)

Wow! i actually remember reading this a long time ago, i don't know y i didn't comment it! it's great, i could actually see it when i was reading it (not the best picture in my mind, but that's a good thing). 5/5!!

*Shawte*

I agree with tamsin about the last line and changin the words around so that they rhyme, apart from that another fantastic poem!
I enjoy reading your poems, added you to my favourites aswell =D
5/5

I agree with the change of words....but other than that ...awesome job

Oh wow that poem is so powerful. please say this ins't about you though. bu thanks for the sweet comment:)

-chelseaa;

Hey aly I really life this poem..i know the meaning of it and i like how it rhymes keep up the writing i am glad that my writing inspires you....love yah aly Mandz