Well what do you think? constructive critisism and helpful comments welcome. i could use all the help i can get

This is really moving and sad the description of the mothers death literally moved me, such a sad haunting story. well done

I love it hunn you are an amazing writer keep it up

WOW! this is really good. it's so sad. i love it. it tells such a sad story. (and thanks for the comment, i really appreciate it!! you're on my favorites too!!)

The flow was a bit stilted at times but the sheer emotion and power of the words carried it through.
Well done on this poem, you wrote it with passion and thats whats needed
5/5
*Gem*