by debbylyn
Rachel you did a perfect job putting to rhyme this horrible crime and the hurt suffered by all. May the judge show no mercy on him, and may he soon meet God to be the final judge and give him his eternal punishment. |
by Cindy
You know how i feel. I just wish i could be there to look him in the eye. You did an amazing job telling this painful story. Love You Aunt Cindy |
by ALEX
That's terrible. What he did. Not the poem. The poem's great. It's just really sad, that's all. Wow, i really can't talk right now. That's how great this is! Anyways, great job! |
That is an amazing and unbelievalbe poem! It was very sad and horrible but wow. Great job! 5/5 God Bless |
by Rona
Wow! I am speechless. I really am. This was excellent! I can't imagine what the victims went through, but I'm glad the truth finally came out. Justice will be served! Anyway, great job! I liked this poem 5/5 |
by Tara Kay
Well done Rachel, i could really feel the emotion throighout the poem. What a terrible thing to happen, if only we knew why the world holds these cruel selfish people. |
Wow, this is really well written! and i hope the bastard sits for life! |
by Cindy
I am using my daughters computer to coment on this poem.This happened at my home to my precious little girl while I cooked their dinner he was abusing my little girl. Its been a year and a half since he was charged and it is still painful.We are still going to counceling and trying to heal.Sometimes I think it will never happen but they say time heals all wounds.I know I can never forgive him. Rachel you put to paper what we all feel Thank you darling. Keep writing.Love Nan |
by *Charisma*
Wow! very good poem. Truly amazing and I'm so glad your mom found the contest. She must be a poet on this site too! Umm...my only thing is I don't like any religious references even those relating to only God. Just because my opinion can conflict with others and it's so hard to judge when you may not agree. You know? So may JUST on the contest one you could edit that one line and then it would be absolutely perfect. Such an amazing poem though with great flow and rhyme! |
by Corinne
Matter of factly, yet powerfully written. Please do write about the outcome |
Wow. That's all I can say. I am sorry if this is true for you. Or anyone you know for that fact. It's horrible to be abused by someone you thought you loved, and then it's even harder to see them get their 'medicine' for it. If you know what I mean. I be here if you need someone to talk to. =) |
by Goran Rahim
This is another great poem by you, you are really a great writer. keep up the great work like always. another 5/5 from me. |
by Laura
This was very well written. I like how it was a story in a poem. Most poems you see like this the poem seems forced at times but this one did not seemed forced at all. The flow was great and you could tell that you wrote this with a vengeful passion. He deserves whatevr her gets for ruining the lives of so many children...even tho this is a really sad poem it is also support for all the victims out there that are keeoing a dirty lil secret...now they may find the courage to come forward. Very well written and I really enjoyed the read it was captivating. |
Good poem i really like it your a good writer...i will comment your other one too but i have to go eat thanks |
by Leanne
All i can say on this poem is WOW!! |
This poem is so great, it's a poem but it's like reading a story. It's upsetting knowing that this happens to kids all the time, he deserves more then anything he can be given for all the pain he has caused, great write and great flow 5/5 |
This poem.. is amazing. Very very sad. You did an amazing job at the rhyming, the flow, word choice.. everything, you did an excellent job! You really are a talented poet. ... Wonderful.. sad.. poem |
by Bryan
This is a very good poem rach, i loved the story behind it, great flow and great poem, as usual i give this a 5/5!!! please keep it up, your poems are good!!! |
by Cattiebrie
Eloquent and focused, well written! I was moved, |
by dora
Wow this was so indept. it was such a powerful poem. the words u used were just great!! very well written poem! good job on this one!! xx |