This poem is really good.
Dark. My favorite stanza is
"On ties that bind,
I break the vow.
Don't look behind,
they're watching you now.
Trapped.
Preyed"

Great Job.
Always,
Koriey.

Wow.. another beautiful poem... beautifully written.. very deep... awesome choice of words!!! Love your work!!! Can't wait to read another one of your poems!! 5/5!
Much Love,
~*Danielle*~

Wow... this poem is really interesting. It definately keeps your attention. I loved the unique form of this poem. You did an exellent job! 5/5 for sure :) Oh, and thank you for the comment on my poem. But I'm curious...what made you comment on that one? It's certainly not under the dark category anymore, I submitted it ages ago. Just curious. :)
~Midnight Sun

Well done on a simply sublimely penned piece of work. utterly fabulous, but i'm curious, what was the inspiration behind this one? Is there a story behind it or was it one of those ocasions when you start writing something random and it just writes itself out of the blue?
Either way this is exalent and I look forward to reading more of your work. I'm deffinately adding this, and you, to my faves lists.

hugz ^_^
Saraphene

P.s. thankyou for your kind comments on my poem, "Only in hell are we equal". its nice to know your work is appreciated. I think you might like my poem"lament of a vampire". are there any of yours you recomend?

A promise,
fading and dying.
I hold it in my heart,
stop me falling.
Recited.
Repeated.

very well written first stanza that was capturing and beautiful, keep up the great work---tara