Capture

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Jan 12, 2007


Decay swept across the lands, across the very burden of life,
Fire arose in the darkest of the nights, speaking of its strife.
Lies were kept and secrets found across this land,
Across many places, I looked down to see the world in my hands.
Such a delicate morsel to be forbidden I held,
Deep within as the storms of gods quietly quelled.
Facading, burning bridges all around my sight
Bleed for the thought of life and everyone's fight.
Held in my hands, sun shining brightly, a beauty to all,
These burning bridges stand, for they will not fall.

On the other side a precious bit of hope is lain
To taunt me of bitter lies and worthless hope that remain.
Burning so brightly, dangerously, in precious light of fire
Hope remains on life's side, I on death as my only desire.
Crawling to the fire, I lay by the remains of death,
As I take lay to my final, agonizing rest.
Yet, as I lift my head to a whistle in my mind,
The rain pours down on desolate bridges I do find;
The fire dies and hope prevails on the other side,
As burning bridges smolder, looking at me are hope and pride.
Smiling a catchy, friendly smile for the world to see,
These burning bridges died, yet they will not capture me.

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  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Wow.. this poem is soo amazing.. the flow is perfect and the word choice spectacular.. and the last line was KILLER!.. really great job!

  • 17 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Ok. I liked the use of alliteration in this piece.
    The subject was different. However, (I don't know if my brain's out of focus but...) the overall message and subject was a little loose and even unclear. I got the jist, but parts seemed to waver off into descriptions that were hard to decifer. That may be why it was down rated, simply because it's hard to follow.
    Other wise it was good. There were obviously many descriptive words which many poems lack. The rhymes were decent too.
    Keep writing.

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    "These burning bridges died, yet they will not capture me."

    I LOVED that line!
    Who voted this down? Stupid people.
    The wording and imagery in this were breathtaking, I really enjoyed this.

  • 17 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    "Such a delicate morsel to be forbidden I held,
    Deep within as the storms of gods quietly quelled" This s written flawlessly. I must this is sixth one I've read now and all of your writting is amazing. I really don't know what else to say. 5/5

    marcella

  • 17 years ago

    by e LIZ a beth

    Great job. i really like the rhyming scheme!!! Such a delicate morsel to be forbidden I held,
    Deep within as the storms of gods quietly quelled.

    that line sounds amazing. great jobbbb

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