by Jenni Marie Jan 12, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
I've tried my hardest to move on |
by Chrissie
OMG!! I think this is my favourite. It is from the heart and so sweet. I totally love it!! |
Aw this is so sad.. the last stanza was so powerful. I hope that you can get over this and it doesn't comsume you like it can do to other people. Just try and let go of the memories and I think things will get better. The writing was very good the only thing I can critique on is the one line "So I'll keep my emotions hid." I know that you did that to stick with the rhyme scheme but it just doesnt fit and takes away a great deal from the poem. I hope you can figure out a way to fix it, but other than that it was preaty good.. |
This poem is so heartfelt and beautiful, and i love the title because its so absolutely true. keep up the good work! |
This poem is really good! And I'm sorry for your lost. |