Wishing On A Broken Star

by TimidOutburst   Jan 13, 2007


Wishing for you
Wishing for us
Wishing for this
I'm giving up

I've tried so long
For you to notice
Getting your attention
Is more than hopeless

Like throwing pennies in a well
As if wishes were that cheap
The only time they come true
Are in dreams where I sleep

That's the closest I get
To you ever loving me
And until you do
I'll never be free

Bound in these chains
Of frustration and tears
They grip ever tighter
As they grow with my fears

But when I see your face
On these endless nights
You only slip away
Into the morning light

Just before the dawn
You don't seem so far
But wishing for you
Is like wishing on a broken star

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  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    Hmm, a very good title. It instanstly draws most readers to it because it's unique.
    The whole tone of this poem was quite bittersweet and that matched the message perfectly.
    The only thing i can suggest is try to keep the stanza's in the same length and rhythm. But i know collabs are quite difficult so 5/5 all the same =)
    *Gem*

  • 17 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    Hello Ladies. I really like this one. The title drew me in and I enjoyed the poem a lot. My favorite lines are

    Bound in these chains
    Of frustration and tears
    &&
    Just before the dawn
    You don't seem so far
    But wishing for you
    Is like wishing on a broken star

    Great job! 5/5

    Ciao

  • 17 years ago

    by bethany

    Omgosh I love this poem you are good I can so relate right now 5/5 keep up the good work

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