Comments : CRUSH

  • 17 years ago

    by J Lau

    Good write... short, sweet and full of love. If I may suggest... change "your eyes I can't forget" to "your eyes I cannot forget". There are a couple of minor errors... "Your the one i would miss" should be "You're the one" and "you always seem to stair" should be "seem to stare". Other then that... good write... keep writing... 5/5