by Al Jan 14, 2007
category :
Life, society /
other
It's such a pretty sight |
Hey AI. It was an awesome poem. It expressed many things I believe too, and how life REALLY is...u know, not like the life we actually dream about.I really enjoyed it though, good job. By the way, I was wondering if u remember me by chance? We used to chat a lot in the, well, chat room! lol.U know, when like joker and lorna used to be there. It was a couple years ago...Well, i remember u, its nice to see some of the people from b4 again...Well just wanted to say hi and c how u were doing..once again, great job and i will check out some other of your poems too..Take care... |
I like the way this moves along, and the way you've used some pretty cliched rhyming without it sounding trite. But I question the repetition of "dream" in the last stanza. It seems to me you were struggling to bring the poem to a conclusion. |
by CY GINDLE
Yo check the poem by jamica called |
by CY GINDLE
I do like ur sence of humor |
by CY GINDLE
Four years by nicole |