by lala Jan 15, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
You have forsaken me |
by Live WeLL
Very deep and very emotional.. many people can def relate to this poem.. very well written.. good job.. keep it up and thanks for the comment =] |
by Mousie
Now this one was really good, really a great write... i'm gonna give you one tip, as you're getting older, work on the vocab, try to steer clear of the generic words, put more description into them... you're already starting to do that, and being the age you are, that's wonderful, you certainly don't write like a 13 yr old... great job, you really have a lot of talent. 5/5 |
by Curry
Wow you are an amazing writer! |
by Sandra D
This poem is amazing!! i really can relate, that's exactly how i felt when my ex broke up with me, it tore me apart inside. i cried over him, he'd lied to me for so long about the way he felt... but great job! u have a lot of talent, i can't wait to read more!! 5/5!!! |
by Namida
Wow, this is a great poem. Keep up the good work! But its good to trust people, and I hope you regain that trust. |