Wow, what a clever twist at the end, very original nice poem, u have talent

I haven't really read anything like this before but it was done very nicely, i love the unexpected twist at the end, nice job bro 5/5

Thanks all. Karl thanks again buddy. I might be trying to write out some alternate endings to this, only time will tell.
TuxB

Very good except "His son returned 4 years later." as it is incorrect to use a 4 but rather a four. This is if you wish to hand it it at school... well done. Good use of plot and an unusual rhyme scheme.

Wow amazing!!! hey thanks for the comment!!! it means a lot to mean! i love your poem!!!!----tara

A wonderful poem with a surprise ending; a job very well done. 5/5

Wow, I thought this was an very good poem, you have talent and keep up the good work! by the way thanks for the comment on my poem!!
[[Katie Lynn]]

GREAT POEM!
really cought my attention!
Thanx 4 tha comment!=)

-Haii

Wow ~ It was a poem you couldn't stop reading because you wanted to know how it ended and the ending surely delivered ~ Nice twist ~ Great job ~