This is nice Joe...

One wish, in the mist of the night
Tears rolling down your face
Forever is what you wished
Hoping and praying that it'd become true

What I think we all wish for...everlasting love.

Debbie

Not bad, but nor is it one of your best poems. It could have been better if you took more time to draw it out and give the readers details. Good job anyways. =D

I didn't really like this poem until the end. The last stanza was very strong and well written, which made the whole poem look alot better. I found the second stanza was a bit confusing. I liked the emotion you used in this poem though, it really stands out.

--Steph

Short but very lovely! I love the last stanza:
"One wish, in the mist of the night
Tears rolling down your face
Forever is what you wished
Hoping and praying that it'd become true"
I thought you did an amazing job creating an image using such descriptive words! Well done! =)

Good one ...really all depends on ur wish to come true..gr8

God bless u

This is sad but true and beautiful, a very nice read.

Joe, this was a very nice write. I don't really know what to say. I really like the ending stanza. Keep writing!!

-` Poetess

Aww i love the idea of this poem, i can really relate to the emotions expressed in it. It's short and simple, and sometimes the simple poems are the best!Although i like poems that rhyme, this one really works, and the word-choice is good.

4/5

-kayla