WOW this absoluetly blew me away. Haha leave it to you to write something about this! You should definately show it to Trevor, I'm sure he could relate lmao. I really did like this, it flowed really well and i reminded me of bad sixty's movies haha. Great work.

--Steph

Interesting idea, concept and presentation. I did like it though. :) It flowed well, and had pretty good imagery too. Nice job on this piece. *5/5

Ah!! For a second there I thought you were trying to control my mind. Well, this was a very good effect in this poem, you wrote to the audience, rather than for them. That was really creative.

I loved this
i have never heard a poem
quite like this before

i love how it starts out as a 60's go-go dancer
on acid
and then you end it by her realizing all that shes lost

great job

and a well deserved

5/5