Cindy you did a good job writing of this terrible incident from your past. I hope it is healing for you to talk about it and put it to verse. Remember you were the victim in this and did nothing wrong....he was the criminal you thought of as a friend. you've been a writing machine lately! Way to go!

This is sad yet really spoken ... sometimes those who experanced are the only ones who can truely tell. and i think that this is why you can tell the words so well

.................................
dont hate yourself please,
dont let him win.
when others fall to their knees,
dont let them hold it in.

he hurt you,
though you didnt tell.
when it is all through he will be in hell.

This is sad yet really spoken ... sometimes those who experanced are the only ones who can truely tell. and i think that this is why you can tell the words so well

.................................
dont hate yourself please,
dont let him win.
when others fall to their knees,
dont let them hold it in.

he hurt you,
though you didnt tell.
when it is all through he will be in hell.

I'd like to comment properly Cindy, but it's a bit to painful. I hope you understand.
Great poem as always though. Very emotional
5/5
*Gem*

Oh my god, that is really sad and shocking. I liked the poem though I hate to think of it as reality. I hope you're doing fine now!
5/5

:S WOW! once again we have a perfect picture of whats happening, I hope everything gets better for you and your family...

This is a really good poem cindy, the flow is perfect, i give it a 5/5!!! keep it up!!!!

Very sad and painful. I'm glad you wrote of this. I know it helps me to write of my painful past. You are a corageous person and your write is very good

Hi Cindy
While this is a very painful experience to write about, I thought the writing could have been a little more personal - "Eyes crying" - eyes don't cry - you do. Also, the voice was a bit too "passive" as in the lines:
A child's mind you shattered...
Knowing not your evil mind....
Your intentions then revealed...
Hearts not wanting to break...

Some of the writing I found too specific, yet there weren't enough details. As in "Laughing as you went"

I think you're a really fine writer. I just thought this could have been told even more powerfully.

This is so sad, but beautiful! 5/5

Would really like to know more abt this & i hope this is all just a fiction.

Nicely expressed though

all the best and take care

WoW! thats awesome Cindy!!!
a very heartfelt poem full of depression & pain

thats really well written & lovely expressed =)
You've lots of talent n ur poetry..its hidden actually =)

Keep that Up
NemO xxxxxxxxxxx

Insane emotion.

Its great.

I would like to say that I think you expressed it wonderfully. And eyes do cry. I thought it had the right amount of detail. Too much would have made it explicit. The flow was good and I understood exactly what you were trying to convey in this one. Great job telling about such a painful experience. I don't know how anyone could critisize raw emotion from the heart. Don't let it discourage you. You are doing a wonderful job. Keep it up!

Hey Cindy,
Another emotional write from you. The pain and emotion within this poem stands out, its very sad.
Keep writing, i love reading your poems
Love, your friend, Tara-Kay

Wow.. really great emotion and descriptions.. this is really sad.. but an amazing poem!! the emotion is just .. idk you really made this a SPECTACULAR poem.. definitly my favorite so far

I think its good to get it out, I am so sorry to know that something this horrible happened to you ,someday somehow,he will pay! I believe God will see to that.

Another very solid write, beautifully penned poem. Good Job!

This was so sad, I have tears in my eyes.
I'm sorry you had to go through this, I know how much it hurts

I understand this one, this is so sad this happened and has been brought up again. I've been abused by many people and the scars don't ever fade do they ? :( you wrote this so bravely and made a good poem out of it, well done xxxx