Wow! i thought this was a really good poem..i enjoyed reading it...love pretty much sux..im sorry if this poem happened 2 u.....

and thanx 4 the comments on my poems..and 2 answer your question no i havent won any competitions or contest...i guess im not good enough. but i will get better eventually...

~michelle~

How come this only has one comment!?!?

Behind those eyes is a girl whoss broken.
Regretting the words she has left unspoken.
Everyday she has this regret.
She puts it behind hoping to forget.
^ 100% can relate. Words left unspoken are one of the worst feelings honestly. You capture the feelings of this and how difficult it is to pick up the pieces and try to get on with your life - trying, hoping, and pleading to forget the words left unspoken and the regret you have not speaking them. It's murder!

He's seen her cry, he's seen her smile.
She hasn't showed her happy face in a while.
She thinks about his hands, his touch.
She thinks she has a problem; she thinks too much.
She cries herself to sleep at night.
^Amazing! The vivid imagery is too strong to not see in this stanza. It oozes into the readers mind the depth of darkness she is feeling. The struggle is real, it's difficult, it is something unbearable. Thinking is a plague, I love how you made it just pop out how hard it is to just stop. - Wow, blows me away.

When will she let go of the lip she continues to bite?
She has a few imperfections.
And out of everyone he is her selection.
This relationship could work if they would just try.
But, he continues to leave her wondering why.
^Another stanza I can relate to.I loved 'And out of everyone he is her selection.' What a really beautifully written sentence within such an emotionally sad piece. The hope that surrounds this stanza is light a light within the darkness. She see's the light even if it's dim, she sees it and hopes he will see it too. To break through the darkness to open up the light.
These are questions and only he has the answers to them.

She wants to work up the courage to ask him...
But, shes scared of rejection and another broken heart.
Why cant they just make a new start?
The way she misses him drives her crazy.
His eyes must be very hazy.
They love each other.
Whats holding them back from one another?
She loves him more than hell ever think.
So, think about what you have it could be gone within one blink.
^ Strong ending. Before I jump in you may want to change 'hell ever think.' to 'he'll ever think.' Now it's scary isn't it? To work up the courage to ask the one you love something when things are so shaky? I've been there..Love the description again, 'His eyes must be hazy.' Love that it's a metaphorically well placed part. Doesn't he see her love for him? Open up your eyes! A wild piece my friend, a beautifully sorrowful poem I am very happy I took the time to read. Wish it had more comments, it sure deserves them.

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