5/5. Amazing. just perfect! I loved how you wrote this. Especially the end. Your an amazing poet!

Wow this is very powerful. its really good and i liked how you changed the stanzas from 4 lines to 2 lines. 5/5

Wow. this poem was very descriptive. your word choice was great and everything just flowed very nicely together. i loved it. 5/5

Oh wow. That was a very powerful piece. I loved the flow and how you represented your ideas through it. Bravo. I especially liked these lines for some reason, they just stood out to me.

With a noose in his hand.
A gun to her head.
Their going to a land,
a land of the dead.

Omg...im dont know what to say...this poem was freaking outstanding!...it pictured images in my head...strong language kept me interested the whole time...and the flow was good...this is really a great poem no joke. 5/5

Wow this is a very powerful poem! the word-choice and imagery was good.Flow needs some improvement, but thats about it. Also the rhymes could be better but i loved the words you used.

-kayla

This poem is WOW, written so greatly, you have showed a great efford, and you have proved you are so talented. i realy like this poem, keep up the great job.5/5

Great poem, not sure how i came across this but i am glad i did. 5/5 this was wonderful

I loved the secound stanza of this poem:

"With a noose in his hand.
A gun to her head.
Their going to a land,
a land of the dead."

It really got me hooked and edge me to read more of this poem. This was written excellently, and the imagery was great, you could imagine it all. Veyr powerful and very deep read. I liked the ending, when you made some words in caps as they were more important, it has great effect. i htought you could of used better punctuation, but still an excellent read! Kepe up the good work! xx

Wow! Great job! I really liked this one! It's soo beautifully written..
You really have lots of talent!
Keep it up

Really different and unusual for good,words with Caps-lock open made it different,i especially liked

** When existence is a lie,
it leads to suicide.

It's totally true
Keep it up
See ya
Laura