Debbie our Papaws would be so proud of you. This is such a wonderful poem. I know this will bring tears to many eyes when read. Excellent job!

Very well done! I greatly enjoyed the flow of this poem. You always have great work!
Charisma*

I love this one. Actually I love them all . Both Papaws would have enjoyed this poem. I bet Mamaw D would love to hear it. Mamaw F would have been so proud of you and just bragging about how talented. She is smiling down upon us. I love the imagery in this piece. It tells the story of a coal miners day with impeccable rhythm and rhyme. Wonderful dedication to our Papaws RIP to them both. 5/5 to you!

Gosh, Debbie. This was just WOW. I don't know what to say. I love how you wrote this...I could picture everything in my mind as I was reading this. Kinda weird, I started writing a poem a while ago called, "Under The Arizona Sky"...never finished it though. Heh. This poem kinda reminded me of it. Anyways, this was great!! I love it! 5/5

-` Liz

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Sry it took so long to make my comments (you prolly forgot I even needed to give you one),lol...I'm really behind.
But I agree with dave...it was really great you could write this for them, you did an amazing job. And I'm sure they would be proud. Keep up the amazing work! :)
~Midnight Sun

Wow. Phenomenal write. I'm blown away by your talent. Wonderful imagery, wording/word choices, flow, subject, emotion, etc etc. Really, really, really well-written. Congrats! 5/5

Wow! i really like this poem!! it has alot of emotion put into it....i live in west virginia and i think its great that you wrote a poem for you grandpas that live here....good job!

Wow, wonderfully written. The flow was good, and the emotion within was outstanding. You are very talented, keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

I really like this D. It would work as a lyric as well (to me, anyway) Great descriptive words.

Deb,
I am so happy to see this on the top. It is an amazing poem. Well deserving. I love you! Your sister Cindy

Very nice write about a hard working group of men. beautiful

I liked it. very great

Grandfather was a miner.....
died of pneumonia....I never met him but dad spoke of him....so interesting comments and a great poem.....

Very thought provoking!

10.....

Well, I loved it.
Probably the reason you got first in my contest.
It was quite the poem, and you're quite the poet.

My favorite stanza was the last stanza. Loved it,

Debbie this was a pleasure to read. I loved the way you worked the first and last lines into the story so well - they didn't sound forced or out of place - brilliant flow. And it makes it even more special to know its dedicated to someone you love. Most definitely a 5/5

I know I've commented on this already - but I just had to come back and read it again! I think this is probably my most favourite poem on the site.

Excellent poem, i really enjoyed it good work 5/5.

PS. plz comment and rate on my poems

A wonderful and moving tribute .....though the second line did confuse me just a bit...
Really fine and complex yet clear....

This is beautiful....Despite being relatively short, you managed to put in so much depth, emotion and imagery. a very beautiful and elegant tribute.

Debbie,
I thought for sure that I had already commented on this, but I knew I had read it. This is such an amazing write, I related so much to it. My Daddy and my papa jaybird were both coal miners. They lived in W. Va. and lived in Kermit, which is real close to Berwind. I loved this write and it flooded so many memories of the stories I had heard growing up as a teen.