Underneath

I loved this.. It was so deep & powerful. I love how you had a hidden message.. & I think I found it. ?

Underneath your lies and deceit is everything you have hidden from me, behind the walls stacked with fantasies lies your amazing reality.

I'm pretty sure that's it. And I e f f i n' love that.. It's so beautiful! Your wording was really good. & everything flowed pretty well.

Again: The message was amazing.

Amazing how you can survive, for
Reality has begun to fall.

^ I love these two lines.. So powerful & beautiful.

Bri x

Really really good poem!

i think the hidden message is that someone lied to someone else... and the person is hurt...

this is a really good poem... for the category i dont really know where u should put it...

Under your lies and deciet is everything you have hidden from me, behind the walls stacked with fantasies lies your amazing reality.

I love this poem. It's got a unique personality, especially with the hidden message. Great write!!!!

5/5

marcella

Wow. great poem. it was amazing!!! and i love the hidden message. i think theres a name when you do something like that but im not to sure what it is.. lol. anywhooo thanks so much for your comment your the first person on this site to actually critique my poems. i appretiate it and im going to try to fix it up. and great job!!!

This poem is AMAZING!!!!!