Don't edit this! I think this is excellent, the only thing I'd suggest is not using some phrases consistently, I know because I do it too. For instance, I know you've used "tears burn my cheeks" previously. But once again, this poem has a strong message. Good work!

Well done on these i know i wouldn't have been able to do them.
I don't think it needs editing i like it the way it is!!

This is soo sad.. she had to go through all of that then the pain of aborting a fetus. I loved how you showed the struggles that she went through as opposed to just sticking to what was happening to her. Way to go. 5/5