Although I think the rhyme scheme seemed a little forced at time, this is a beautiful and heartfelt poem with genuine feeling. Great job!

Great poem. It was beautiful, awesome flow, beautiful language.
5/5
♥
~Stephen White

I really liked this... it's very... lovey. lol. It's really well written and has a good flow. Except maybe in the last stanza. It doesn't flow as well as the others but overall it was great. 5/5

marcella

I'll give it to you, this poem was full of lovely sweet emotion, a real heartwarming love poem. I guess it's what crushes and love is all about.
I'll be honest though and say it seemed like an average poem to me, overall.
The rhymes were predictable, as was the overused language. Not all poems have to rhyme, half of mine don't. Plus, if you don't rhyme you don't have the constriction of having to use certain sounding words.
Also, here the final stanza doesn't rhyme therefore isn't inkeeping with the rest of the poem, so it sounded odd.
I think you have the potential to write even more lovely and touching writes, you just may want to try free verse. Also, a thesaurus is a great way to find creative words so you aren't using the same ones over and over again.
Good effort, keep writing & keep improving.

This was a cute poem Joe, but not your best. The rhyming was a little confusing through it all.. Its like you changed ur rhyme scheme half way into it, and it made it hard to get the message out of the entire thing.

Hey well done joe. this poem had so much love in it. it was amazing!

5/5 david

Oh, beautiful.
I loved it so much.
The rhythm was perfect and I loved it from start to finish. Great work. Can't wait to read the next one!

This is totally a cute piece.. you had a few flow errors but it was great! 5/5

My love for you began to grow
And even started to show

^^my fav stanza^^

lol keep up the good work!

Beautiful poem it flows really well and was fabulously written, there is a great deal of love in this peice to 5/5

--emz--

Aww!That was so sweet.I love love poems!*lol*True love is amazing and I can speak out of knowing.This is a great poem.The flow was pretty smooth and the word choice was simple but good.5/5

<3Amber

Aw this is so cute, i wish someone could write me love poems, that were ABOUT me! :) love the rhyming, the poem flowed well too! cant wait to read the other parts! :

Keep it up =n= take care!

Its a wonderful feelin to love and be loved....but sumtimes it makes me think how much hurti'll be in the end...i know im a lil pessimist here but as they say..nothing lasts forever...

Truly is a beautiful write. Well written.
The poem was so touching
5/5

Ah isn't true love wonderful.

This was a great porm.The emotion you put into it was sincere and heart felt.The flow was a little off but that's no biggie.I'm a sucker for love poems so this one was really good.5/5

<3Amber

Waw, nice one i realy enjoy reading it, keep it up

That was...wonderful. :D I don't mean to be a bother, but some of the rhymes seemed a bit...forced. However, it was still an excellent piece.

Excellent poem my friend. Im a big fan of the way you rhyme. I know there are tons of poem styles but to me the best one's are the ones that rhyme and stay true to a grand purpose or point. You wright your thoughts exceptionally well.

Randy East

The rhyme seemed a bit forced in this poem. However, the emotion was there 100%. When I read this poem I could see and feel the emotion put into it. I don't know what part 2 sounds like or even if there is a part 2...but it almost seems like part 2 would have a sad ending. Anyways! Loved this poem =-]