Comments : Goodbye

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni

    I liked this poem, but i felt that the flow was thrown off in a few areas. the rhyme scheme was great, yet this one line stuck out at me,

    "The pain I've hidden
    Deep inside
    It's eating me up
    Alive"

    the first time i read through i enjoyed it, but the second time, I found that it seemed a little forced i guess?

    good poem though [: