This is great whomever rated this a 2.0 need help. 5/5

Splendid. I liked the consistent theme, because you constructed it so well. And I especially liked things like "The cold touch upon my skin, warms my heart" because it just sounded so...eerie, I guess you could say.
Good job.

You could use some more punctuations like commas, exlcamation marks, periods etc.

I'm not sure if I liked the fourth verse with five lines but it gives the poem a visual twist.

But otherwise, good poem.

-Kenneth G. @ Faceless Mirror.

I really liked it, it made me think of my friend that had drown 2 years ago.
great job

Wow, very...i dunno how to describe it!!! thats good!

Wow that just makes you kind of depressed even though you arn't that kind of person. I need to watch some butt kicking movie now or something xDD

Ah. This is, if you ask me, your best. Simple, oddly soothing in it's execution. I enjoy the 'I'm - deep and I'm drowning' it's lovely, a beautiful write.

Thankyou, this was a contest entry. ^^ And yes, alot of people say it's Pinnochio-esque.

Yes we shall. o3o

*Puts them away*

OH MY GOD. THE NERVE.

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