Sutch a sad story... very well written I enjoyed it very mutch. KEEP IT UP =)

I love this. this was absolutely wonderful. I feel that way sometimes. Heartwrenching at times, or maybe thats just me. Anyway. keep it up. You're good.

-Emily-

Omg this poem is sooo pwerful!! i love it! its so sad though and gosh wow its awsome! a couple of suggestions though... "They older man pointed to me" - i think they is supposed to be the?.. and ... "as he lay there propped up there in the bed".. i suggest that you only use one there in that sentence.. other than that this poem is perfect!! great job 5/5

I can totally relate to the ending....one person really can make a difference. Don't you wish more of the world realized that?

Wow. That was a great poem. It told a sad story that I could relate to and yet enjoyed reading. Good work! 5/5